“I sure hope you’re not trying to steal my mermaid mister.
Or you and me gonna have issues.”
He slowly backed away from Marina.
“There ain’t no problem here, Sir.
I’m just talking to your lady friend.”
He raised his baseball bat.
Coney Island Love Song
A Savage Joy 
Thanks for reminding me of Coney Island!
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You are very welcome! 😉
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I really like how your dialogue carries the story. Great title, too!
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Thanks Jennifer. I’m glad that you enjoyed it! 😉
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These guys better take care or somebody’s gonna end up in the papers! Nice job. Well done.
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Ha – exactly! Thanks, I appreciate that 😉
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Great take on the prompt!
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Thanks Cindy!
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Coney Island is a great choice of setting for this piece as it subtly adds volumes to the characterization description. Nice :))
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Thanks Jo-Anne, I was trying to find a place in my mind and just kept coming back to Coney Island every time 😉
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Loved the dialogue. It gave a great picture in my mind of your characters.
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Thanks Kathy! Delighted it worked for you 🙂
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Coney Island was the perfect setting for this piece.
Hands off my treasure mister.
very nice.
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Thanks Kir! Delighted that you enjoyed!
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That baseball bat has me all sorts of nervous.
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Ha! I’m slightly worried for myself. As I look back, many of my posts are about murderous intent 😉
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Now THAT’S a story in 42 words. Nice!
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Thanks Genna! Delighted you enjoyed 🙂
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The perfect picture of an afternoon on the Boardwalk. Lovely!
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Do I sense a little sarcasm – haha – thanks 🙂
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I too loved the Cooney Island take. Great take!
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Coney* I meant. Oops!
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Thanks Soumyaa 😉
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Your use of ‘mister,’ ‘gonna,’ and ‘ain’t’ really adds to the richness of the dialogue.
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Thanks for picking up on these words, exactly the sort of comment I was hoping for 🙂
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You nailed it! Loved the last line, especially. 🙂
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Thanks Wizard!
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Great voices here! Too bad the magic of mermaids can’t vanquish the violence of baseball bats.
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Indeed! Thanks Kymm 😉
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A complete 42-word story that shows so much about a slice of the world.
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Thanks Meg, I appreciate your comment! 🙂
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I like the dialogue here. The guy needs to calm down with that baseball bat!
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Absolutely! Glad you enjoyed the dialogue 🙂
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I’ve seen many confrontations like this because I live near Wrigley Field. Throwing a mermaid in the mix makes it all that more ridiculous! nice job!
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Thanks Nate! Would love to be across the pond for 4th July celebrations this year! ;(
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This is a great scene, and it really answers the question (which was a tricky one this week). I had a little trouble figuring out who was speaking – with two “he’s” in the such a short piece it can be a little tricky. But overall I really liked it. Thanks for gargleblasting with us!
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Thanks for the constructive crit and praise – all helpful! I’m glad that you enjoyed 🙂
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The language! It’s so colorful and vibrant! Fabulous creativity with the prompt.
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Thanks Natalie, appreciate your appreciation! 🙂
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Nathan’s Hot Dogs- yum.
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Not by the tonne though 😉
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interesting.
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Thanks, and thanks for following!
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